Hmmmm
You didn't really put a lot of time into this one, right?
Dunno, but it sounds kinda cheap. With this kind of music, you should use more instruments/samples, maybe even some more effects (I can hear you did use some, and they sound very good)
It just sounds like there's something missing.
I can hear a small bass, a single synth, a simple beat (though this is not bad) and here and there a second synth comes in... SFX would really be in place here and there.
Hope you know what I mean :P it's difficult to explain, but I think you got the overall message ;)
3/5